觀點(diǎn)比較選擇類的題目,題干中有兩個(gè)觀點(diǎn) :
觀點(diǎn)1:先天具備
觀點(diǎn)2:后天養(yǎng)成
比較兩個(gè)觀點(diǎn)并且給出自己的看法,則應(yīng)該給出兩個(gè)觀點(diǎn)的合理之處,比較之后在進(jìn)行自己的選擇表態(tài)。
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The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, sport, art or music.(開(kāi)頭段落描述題干所討論問(wèn)題的普遍性。開(kāi)頭句式簡(jiǎn)短,不冗贅,一個(gè)復(fù)合句搞定。插入語(yǔ)的使用避免了題干的機(jī)械性重復(fù),同時(shí)保證了句子的連續(xù)性)
Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music.(-ly副詞開(kāi)頭主題段落一肯定第一個(gè)觀點(diǎn),表示作者本身的態(tài)度)(從句和被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)的使用)So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.(模糊例證,支持上一句中的觀點(diǎn)。從句的使用。連接詞 so 的使用)
However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players. (轉(zhuǎn)折詞however,承接上文,引出第二個(gè)觀點(diǎn)的支持論證)(詞匯方面,innate, differentiate)(語(yǔ)法方面,完整復(fù)合句的使用)In other words, there is more to the skill than a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequently a child practices.(對(duì)于觀點(diǎn)二的支持解釋)(連詞in other words的使用)
I personally think that some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. (表達(dá)自己對(duì)觀點(diǎn)一的部分支持)(詞匯方面, inherit)Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level.(解釋論證,比較反差)(詞匯方面,excel, comparable level)(結(jié)構(gòu)方面,連接詞 such 的使用)But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. (轉(zhuǎn)折詞but引出作者的觀點(diǎn):兼收并取)(詞匯方面,nature versus nurture, mutually exclusive)Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeeded because of both good training and natural talent. (用例證進(jìn)一步解釋“兼收并取”)(詞匯,exceptional)Without the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent(假設(shè)例證支持自己觀點(diǎn)。排比雙重否定句強(qiáng)調(diào)肯定效果).(詞匯方面,continuous, exploit)
In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required.(個(gè)人表態(tài)支持兩個(gè)觀點(diǎn)的結(jié)合。插入語(yǔ)的使用。)
整體結(jié)構(gòu):
第1段(一句)題干是大家長(zhǎng)討論的話題
第2段(二句)學(xué)校相信觀點(diǎn)一
例證支持觀點(diǎn)一
第3段(二句)轉(zhuǎn)折某些人支持觀點(diǎn)二
解釋論證觀點(diǎn)二
第4段(五句)個(gè)人部分同意觀點(diǎn)一
解釋支持自己的立場(chǎng)
個(gè)人更同意兼收并取
解釋支持“兼收并取”的立場(chǎng)
假設(shè)例證支持自己觀點(diǎn)
第5段(一句)個(gè)人表態(tài),觀點(diǎn)一合理,觀點(diǎn)二也合理。
根據(jù)雅思寫(xiě)作的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)四要素來(lái)分析的話:
(1)任務(wù)完成度:強(qiáng)調(diào)了觀點(diǎn)比較選擇類兩個(gè)觀點(diǎn)都要提到,并且論點(diǎn)要展開(kāi)論證。體現(xiàn)了選擇類題目可以選其一或兩者都選。
(2)文章連貫流利性:強(qiáng)調(diào)了文章 總分總和轉(zhuǎn)折段落結(jié)構(gòu)。強(qiáng)調(diào)了小連詞的使用和ly副詞的使用來(lái)表達(dá)作者態(tài)度的流動(dòng)性
(3)詞匯 :復(fù)雜詞匯的出現(xiàn)并沒(méi)有很高的要求,且數(shù)量較少。重點(diǎn)在于用的“準(zhǔn)”而不在于用的“狠” (例如 innate, nature versus nurture, exclusive等)
(4)語(yǔ)法:大都是從句,但是難度并沒(méi)有很大。而且因?yàn)閷?xiě)作內(nèi)容略過(guò)了論證或舉例的細(xì)節(jié),所以句子都比較general,這樣可以避免出現(xiàn)思路太糾結(jié)從而導(dǎo)致語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。正確率是重點(diǎn)。
以上就是小編匯總的關(guān)于雅思應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作范文的相關(guān)介紹,希望能對(duì)考鴨們有所幫助,最后祝大家都能取得優(yōu)異的成績(jī)。