托福寫作高分滿分范文點(diǎn)評(píng)和思路解析：成年人的成長(zhǎng)經(jīng)歷

　　What events make a person an adult?

　　People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies)make a person an adult? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

　　寫作思路展開(kāi)結(jié)構(gòu)分析

　　首先大家需要點(diǎn)出兒童和成人的區(qū)別，也就是Difference between children and adults，比如成熟(mature);獨(dú)立(independent);獨(dú)立思考(critical thinking);解決問(wèn)題(problem solving);自我責(zé)任(self-responsible)等等。接著能夠成長(zhǎng)的EVENT也需要寫好，比較容易想到的有畢業(yè)典禮、18歲生日等。

　　本話題高分范文賞析

　　People have many different ways expressing, celebrating and legislating our passage from childhood into adulthood. I believe that there is no single moment that defines when a child becomes an adult. Becoming an adult is based on a variety of events, namely, when one's body changes, when one's mind expands, and when one accumulates experiences.

　　Small children are usually referred to as cherub like. They are all beautiful with rosy cheeks, bright eyes, and tender skin. As a child grows into an adolescent, they grow taller, but their frames remain quite small. Once a youth grows from an adolescent to an adult, frames develop substantially. Their shoulders broaden and they are able to form defined muscles. This physical change is the most obvious sign of a child becoming an adult.

　　The second modification that occurs is the expansion of one's mind. When one is an adult, they are able to comprehend much more advanced thought processes. They start to be able to think for themselves, and make decisions that are best for them. Children are not capable of making complex decisions regarding their lives or their future. They do not have a mind capable of carefully weighing all of the options and deducing the right choice.

　　This expansion of the mind is a result of the numerous experience a person has on his/her way to becoming an adult. As one moves through the world, they gather important information about how the world works. This information becomes one's personal database of knowledge: such a database is absolutely necessary if one is to grow past childhood. The experiences of which I speak are the happenings in our day-to-day lives. We are constantly placed in situations where we must choose one path or another. Of course, one will make mistakes along the way. These mistakes are an important learning tool, which help us become wise adults.

　　In conclusion, children become adults when they have sufficiently matured. Their bodies, their minds, and the number of experiences they have had must grow. Once this process is complete, they can rightfully claim to be adults.