There is always a brilliant image living in my heart. That is my dear father. Seen through the eyes of many other people, father seems to be a very ordinary person. But he is quite extraordinary in my eyes, I have never lost my wonder at his good-personalities such as diligence, devotion, care, optimism ever since my childhood.
Being a farmer, father works very hard in the fields all the year round. He works from dawn till dusk every day and even till midnight when it is the harvest season. He seldom enjoys leisure with other farmers even if the farm work is not much. He chooses to live a busy life with reluctance to stop for a while.
Father devotes all himself to our family. As we are poor, he always tries his best to support our family and afford the tuitions for my brother and me. For the whole family, for brother and me, he never stops working laboriously in the fields throughout the year. Now he has got a wrinkled face and white hair because of excessive hard work, looking much older and weaker than any other person of his age. In spite of all this, father never complains to us. It is his full devotion that we‘re living a better life now. It is his full devotion that both my brother and I are able to study at college.
Father shows much care to us children and my mother as well. Whenever there is any delicious food on the table, he just leaves it to us while he takes the simple one himself. If my brother and I fall ill, he will not hesitate a moment to get some medicine for us or take us to see the doctor. My mother suffers a bad disease. Father looks after her very carefully. He never lets mother do any heavy work both at home and in the field. Mother appreciates him m much that she often praises him as a model husband before others.
Father is a person full of optimism. He never complains about our poor life. He is never frustrated by trouble. He often tells us that everything will be all right if we have enough confidence in life. Due to his optimism, we are all confident to face our life and work.
We all think that father is not in the least an ordinary man. He plays an extraordinary role in my family. We can‘t have anything without him. Now I‘m pursuing further studies at college far away from father. I miss him very much. And I often see him in my dreams. His great image is deeply carved in my mind.
點評:
本文寫的語句簡短,但飽含感情。文章采取總分總的寫法,不管是總體描述父親還是分段詳細述說父親的愛心和任勞任怨,語句都簡短不拖沓。第一段描述父親的性格時,用到了“diligence, devotion, care, optimism”這些詞,然后從第二段開始,分段舉例描述了父親的這些性格特點。整篇文章看下來,多而不亂,感情真摯??忌趯懽魑臅r,可以借鑒這種寫作的方式,有內容可寫,內容也不雜亂。
本文一些用詞和語句很棒。比如最后一句“His great image is deeply carved in my mind.”中“carved”一詞的運用就很形象,考生平時就要多注重這些詞匯的積累,不能只記住一個詞的含義。